Link to final video

VIMEO LINK

Improved storyboard

The final storyboard with added scenes (The blue notes are scenes that were added in later, scenes with and 'X' were removed)

Shooting script (2)

I have only one more opportunity to shoot footage, and only 30 minutes to do so. So I will have to know exactly the footage I need to shoot for my updated video. This footage will concentrate on the bond between the walker and the dog. I will have to make sure Clara is wearing the same clothes as the last shoot for continuity sake.


List of new footage I need to take and in what order:

1. Shot of dog waiting outside (alone) for a walk.
2. Shot of Clara sitting inside, and goes to check the time on her phone.
3. CU shot of phone in her hand.
4.  Re-shoot taking coat off of coat rack.
5. Footage of Clara greeting dog and playing with him.
6. Re-shoot Clara and dog walking towards the garage.
7. Footage of dog excited to see the lead and begin the walk.
8. ECU shot of Clara's eyes.
9. ECU shot of Clara smiling.
10. Over shoulder shot of Clara looking at dog walking down the lane.
11. Moving shot of dog running towards camera.
12. WS of Clara petting dog as he stares into river.
13. Footage of dog swimming.
14. Low shot of Clara looking/searching for dog.
15.  CU of Clara walking with dog, low shot.
16. WS of Clara and dog walking together.

Feedback on draft video

I had got some feedback on my first video and some ways on which to improve it.

These points will be taken into consideration on my next shoot and edit:

• Show more of a bond between the walker and the dog. Close up shots of eyes and mouths will accomplish this. Also close ups of the dog and walker together (low walking shot).
• The preparation footage at the beginning was a bit too long so the editing of those shots must be tightened up.
• Show the dog doing an activity e.g fetching, swimming etc
• Less static shots.
• Less 'scene setting' shots
• The dogs paw print in the mud (close up shot).

Link to first draft video

LINK TO VIMEO

First storyboard

Shooting script (1)

The order that the footage will be taken

1. Preparation footage: These shots will be taken inside so I will begin my shooting here. I will show the walker preparing for the walk.
  - Taking the coat of the rack, and putting it back again.
  - Putting on her boots.
  - Walking out the back door with the dog circling her feet, excited for the walk.
2. Scene setting shot: Once outside I will take establish the scene is taken place in the country. Shots of fields and branches swaying in the breeze will be the opening shot. There is an abandoned cottage near where I will be shooting so that will be included also.

3. Walking towards the garage to get the lead.

4. Close up shot of opening the garage door with a key and closing the door.

5. Close up shot of taking the lead from the rack.

6. Wide shot of both walker and dog walking towards the camera.

7.  Wide shot of both walker and dog walking away from the camera down the lane.

8. Shot of the walker letting the dog off the lead and a few close ups of the dog sniffing around the ground.

9. Shots of the dog walking/running away from the camera.

10. Shoot a few more establishing shots of the lane and rural surroundings. Establish the walk is taken place in the lane.

11. Shoot a few shots of the river (the river is at the end of the lane). This could be an interesting backdrop for a title screen.

12. While at the river shot some footage of the dog looking into the river.

13. We will start walking back up the lane again. At this point the dog will be put back on the lead.

14. Shots of the dog and the walker walking back up the lane, away from the camera. These shots will be taken at the start of the lane.

15. Back at the house; the lead is taken off the dog and is given a bowl of water.

Idea for final video

I'm going to base my short film on 'A beautiful task'. It will be of my girlfriend walking her dog in the country side, near where she lives. I think that will give me the opportunity to have peaceful and beautiful scenery in my film.  It will start preparing for the walk (putting on boots and coat etc.) and taking the dog down to the river. I want the film to convey a sense of happiness, peacefulness and serenity. 

I will prepare shooting scripts, a storyboard, and shoot a first draft video and I will see how I can develop it from there.

Colour and composition test

HD video link

Story board- 'Scraps' aka The unfinished robot

Elevator pitch- 'The Unfinished Robot'

1. A robot is unfinished by his master and tossed into the rejection bin.
2. The robot goes on a a quest to complete himself by whatever means.
3. He seeks out his masters most prized finished robots and begins to cannibalise their parts for himself.
4. He finds out that with each part he adds the owner of that parts personality/soul is connected to that part. He hears the voice of each robots he takes apart.
5. The voices of his 'victims' echo in his head and the guilt drives him mad.
6. He rips the parts off and crawls back into the rejection bin defeated. His selfish and destructive acts get him no where.

Developed script- 'The Unfinished Robot'

Act 1

Exposition

A workshop purposed to build robots. It uses advanced technology but it is not a shiny futuristic setting, more of a 'steampunk' workshop. A world where technology allows robots to have a personality and conciousness, true artificial intelligence. But robots are not thought equal and are regularly mis-treated and used for manual labour. 

Inciting incident 

The robot is thrown away by his master into the rejection bin, unfinished and deeply hurt. He is missing his legs, and arm and one eye. He seems to be a pathetic creature. 

Plot point 1

While lying in the rejection bin the robot sees his master interacting with his other creations, treating the finished robots in the workshop with admiration and pride.. He then vows to complete himself no matter the cost and win his masters approval. He'll show him that he can be just like one of his great creations. 

Act 2

Midpoint

The determined robot seeks out other robots in the workshop for the parts. After his master leaves the workshop for the night, he crawls out of the rejection bin. He sneaks up on the 'sleeping' robots scattered around the workshop and begins pulling off the parts he needs, in effect destroying the robot.

By adding all these different parts from other 'living' robots he begins to hear the voices of the robots he took apart. Each robot part he added contains still contains the 'soul' or personality of the previous owner.

Plot point 2

The voices in his head become to much and he is overcome with grief. He dramatically rips off the parts he added to himself in a fit of rage/madness.

Resolution:

Defeated he crawls back into the rejection bin as incomplete as he was at the beginning. Selfishness has got him no where and his quest has destroyed the other robots in the workshop. Although the motivation to complete himself and become whole was an innocent one, his actions were destructive and negatively impacted others. The robot has learned a tough lesson.

Character grid

Motivation:
To complete himself and become whole. A pathetic creature looking to better himself. He wants to show his master that he can be completed and become one of his great creations. 

Personality:
Determined but selfish,bitter,greedy,inferiority complex, a sense of rejection that he must overcome.

Looks:
Patched together, missing his legs and one arm, one eye. 

Their world:
A world where technology allows robots to have a personality and conciousness, true artificial intelligence. But robots are not thought equal and are regularly mis-treated and used for manual labour.

Loves and hates:
He hates the other completed robots in the workshop, he hate
He hates how his masters treats them like his own children while he was tossed away.
He loves his master unconditionally and seeks his approval more than anything.

Paradigm- 'The Unfinished Robot'

Setting

A workshop purposed to build robots. It uses advanced technology but it is not a shiny futuristic setting, more of a 'steampunk' workshop

A robot unfinished by his master is tossed in the rejection bin like a piece of trash.

Character:
A unfinished robot; determined, selfish,bitter,greedy,inferiority complex, a sense of rejection that he must overcome. Because he is mistreated he draws sympathy from the audience. He will stop at nothing to complete himself, he is willing to cannibalise the other robots in the workshop to get the required parts.

Quest

The determined robot vows to go out and complete himself and require the parts that he needs. He will do whatever is takes however morally reprehensible. Seeks out other robots in the workshop for the parts.

Conflict

By adding all these different parts from other 'living' robots he begins to hear the voices of the robots he took apart. Each robot part he added contains still contains the 'soul' or personality of the previous owner. This drives him mad with grief and guilt. 

He rips the parts off of him in a fit of rage/madness. 

Resolution

Defeated he crawls back into the rejection bin incomplete. Selfishness has got him no where.